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Lindsay Verde

"An Ocean of Memories" by Lindsay Verde

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Ronin can't help being a selkie, and she can't help her natural longing for the sea. (Ronin means little seal). My submission for the Herscher Project #10, the Wuthering. 
Updated June 2007


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Using the momentum of the waves around her, Ronin rolled to her back, enjoying the feel of the water swelling up to embrace her; like a mother welcoming home her child.

And yet, Ronin felt lost and lonely. For a reason she couldn"t identify, her heart felt empty, the jewels sparkling in her hair - lackluster.

The warmth of the sun she loved didn"t penetrate the skin of her sorrow; reflecting, it shone on everything around her, illuminating their beauty but none of her own.

Turning her thoughts from feelings of rejection, Ronin stared at the shore where a cliff rose gallantly above the majestic waters. A small white cottage perched on the edge of the precipice, bravely challenging the waters below to do their worst on the cliff.

Ronin felt drawn to the quaint little cottage for reasons she couldn"t explain. Her liquid brown eyes shimmered with memories that refused to be trapped, slipping through her grasp like the fish that darted about beneath her.

As the sun slowly sank beyond the cliffs, setting their jagged edges ablaze, Ronin gave one last longing glance at the house, the scene burned upon her memory as she disappeared beneath the foam with a flick of her flipper.

 

~*~

 

A man sat, his sandy brown hair waving in the breeze off the ocean. His arms rested gently on the chair in which he reclined, cradling his infant son. As he stared out over the glittering expanse of water, his features tightened in sorrow.

Placing a delicate kiss on the feather soft head beneath his chin, he gave a pained smile. As he stared into his son"s ocean-blue eyes, he softly whispered, "Not even you could keep her here."

←- Amber Spyglass I | At World's End -→

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26 May 2008:-) Barbara J. Wickham
You are so welcome! I have been owing you a visit for a veeeeery long time. *is sheepish*

It’s harder for me to comment on writing because I don’t feel like I know enough about the ins and outs of the craft. What I will try to do in my comments is to describe the way the story makes me feel. That’s the linchpin of the way I comment on artwork, so I can more readily find the right words to say what I am thinking.

I’m reading, At World’s End now and I will leave you a comment as soon as I finish. 1

:-) Lindsay Verde replies: "Ah, I know how you feel ... I disappeared for 8 months! I’ve got a lot of catching up to do.

Those are the best comments - it allows me to know if I’m getting the feelings I wanted across. I like it when people get attached to certain characters and enjoy the experiences the character goes through and hearing about it and what they thought is the best part.

The only thing I would suggest avoiding is Daughter of Oak, as I’m hoping my muses will get the drive to re-vamp the first part as it is already out of date - missing characters and events that decided to waddle in and plop themselves in when I was just starting the third part. Inconsiderate things.

If you like short little emotional pieces, the other one I would suggest on my shelf is Cast Me Gently ... that one seems to be really well liked."
5 Jun 2008:-) Jai "Jaybird" Foster
Woah! This is beautiful!

:-) Lindsay Verde replies: "Thank you!"
17 Aug 2008:-) Meagan Boonie McGlasson
You are a stunning writer. It’s absolutely amazing the way you can make someone feel after reading only a few lines of your work. I’m so glad I stopped and read this. Thank you.

:-) Lindsay Verde replies: "Thanks! If you liked this one you might also like Cast Me Gently as well ... it’s another short, emotional piece of mine."
3 Jun 200945 Ginny_16
amazing piece of writing with deep emotions

:-) Lindsay Verde replies: "Why thank you!"
15 Jun 2009:-) Olivia N Cain
Wow! That was absolutely incredible! I wish I could learn to use more imagery and emotion like that in my writing... I give that a million out of 10 1 You did a fantastic job! I can’t wait to read some more of your work.

:-) Lindsay Verde replies: "*begins collecting the million into her pocket*

It’s taken me a while to get here ... lots of helpful comments and reminders from friends get to take credit for this result.

I’m very glad that you like it. It’s short but sweet. I’m excited to hearing more of your thoughts on my work 1"
22 Jun 2009:-) Jessica Leigh Matthews
Really good! It was sad, but good!

:-) Lindsay Verde replies: "Aw, thanks! When I’m in a sad mood I write to try and express my emotions and deal with those emotions so I can get on with my day. I’m very happy with how this little piece turned out. It’s small but it has the emotion I was working toward. Thanks for stopping by to visit! 1"
23 Jun 2009:-) MT Starkey
Great description. You’ve painted a very sad but beautiful picture.

:-) Lindsay Verde replies: "I’m glad I managed to capture the feeling I was looking for. Thanks for stopping by to visit."
25 Jun 2009:-) Raine Rainebow Lenix
That was sooooooooo good!!! Short and sweet with brilliant descriptions. LOVE IT!!!

(again)LOVE IT!!!
LEXI

:-) Lindsay Verde replies: "Thanks! I’m glad you like it."
29 Jun 2009:-) Elizabeth emma hampton
Aww thats so sad...and sweet. I loved it! I could picture the entire thing in my head! You used great descriptive detailed that really brought the story to life. You should deffinately write more about these character!! 1

:-) Lindsay Verde replies: "I just can’t help writing about selkies ... their story is so sad - but at the same time there are so many possibilities for them!"
30 Oct 2009:-) Tom Draco Noir Taylor
A sad and lovely story- true to its Celtic roots. As G.K. Chesterton said in his poem "The Ballad of White Horse"-"For the great Gaels of Ireland
Are the men that God made mad,
For all their wars are merry,
And all their songs are sad." I’m part Scots myself, and my wife Lynn’s grandfather was a Leprechaun. We are both were-dragons and can relate to the sadness and alienation of the poor Selkie, we have to go around in human form most of the time.Seriously though, excellent work, I now have to read more of your stuff-it’s all your fault.1

:-) Lindsay Verde replies: "Thank you very much for the visit and comment Tom. I’m a Scot as well ... probably one or two selkies in my family tree 2. Haha, I’ve been told by a few people that some of my stories are good enough to be addicting, it’s a definite balm when I’m struggling with writing 2"
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About 'An Ocean of Memories':
 • Status: OK
 • Created by: :-) Lindsay Verde
 • Copyright: ©Lindsay Verde. All rights reserved!

 • Keywords: Selkie, Ocean, Longing, Son, Husband, Missing
 • Categories: Mythical Creatures & Assorted Monsters, Romance, Emotion, Love
 • Views: 1033


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